UNIT 19-Plan and pitch

UNIT 19 Plan and pitch

P1

Worksheet here

P2

Sci fi moodboard:

Planning Sheet-Group Brainstorm

Group concepts:

1

Idea about a city in the far future that becomes its own nation, and wages war with it's former country. lots of futuristic sound effects needed.

2

Story that follows a group of astronauts from around the world as they travel to colonise mars, high feasibility because majority of show takes place in ship, meaning sound effects needed are fairly limited.

Group idea draft: here

My idea draft: here

P3

Second pitch treatment here

The broken A.I treatment here

My experience pitching:

One thing that people said was good about my pitch was the fact that my points were clear, i managed to condense my selling points into three main things. However a weakness of my pitch was the fact that I struggled to end it as well as I started, and this made the pitch as a whole kind of fall flat at the end.

P4

Pitch video here

P5

Feedback for my pitch:

Good

1. Points were clear, and didn't take too long.
2. I seemed to know the story well enough to answer questions about it at length.
3. I pitched the show in a way that made the show seem feasible and still worthwhile.

Bad

1. Make sure to have a clear main character.
2. make sure to have a clear storyline OR world building approach.

Group pitch feedback

Most of our feedback was positive, but there was one thing that kept recurring and that was the lack of detail in our presentation, people gave us the impression that it kind of read like a blurb, leaving more up to mystery than implying there was actually a story behind it.

I disagree with the notion that we were to vague, I feel as if the nature of a pitch requires that we present some sort of enigma in order to better entice someone to fund the project and uncover the mystery.
However I agree that more detail was necessary about our main character, we didn't really describe his appearance or how he sounds ad i feel this is reflected in the feedback.
Our feedback sheets here

Changes that we made to our script

Lexie's line in last scene changed from"Don't play with your food boys." to "Hurry up and get the information out of him.".

Armed man 1's last line changed from "Im gonna enjoy this." to "You're gonna have to talk eventually, its only a matter of time.".

Product launch date

Resources and equipment

Personnel and activities

Budget

Relevant legal and ethical issues

Group meeting to decide idea

The idea we will go with is The Secret because the reactions it got were better than the other concept's, plus this concept will give us more opportunities to use interesting sound and voice effects in our show.

Consent form

Group radio script Draft 2 here

Group radio script re-format here