Task 1D Character conflict analysis
Not all products follow a story of conflict, but it could be argued that this is why some stories are better than others, in Iron man 3 for example the story starts with conflict in which the protagonist is defeated. The rest of the film is the story of the protagonist preparing for another conflict with the same antagonist, this is interesting to see because while most stories have an arc and conflict peaks in the middle or end this product has conflict at the beginning and the end and less in the middle.
In the game of thrones scene there is a large amount of conflict between the four characters.
Ser Waymar
Will
Gared
Ser Waymar:
Wants to complete the task he has been set by his superiors, he also wants to have his authority respected by Gared and Will, he wants them to show this by following his orders unquestionably but they are hesitant to do so because they fear for their lives. He likely hopes to be rewarded for completing his task so well and in turn wants to rise through the ranks in his position in order to gain a higher social status.
Gared:
Is here with Ser Waymar and Will to complete a tracking task, at this point in his career he cares little for his rank and status as he is already somewhat respected, and more so for living a long life.
He is experienced and as a result has a keen sense for danger, this is why he wishes to return after Will discovers the bodies. The conflict arises when Ser Waymar says that they will investigate further, Gared realises that they are in danger and wishes to return to the wall but this means that Ser Waymar will return empty handed as such and as a result may face punishment from a superior.
Will:
He is a much lower rank than the other two characters and also has the lowest status in the scene, he wants to go back to wall and not die, the bodies he found have frightened him greatly and he wishes to return rather than complete the task. this is in direct conflict with Ser Waymar, someone who thretens to kill him if he tries to return; " this is an example of a conflict that could escalate and become physical.
Task 1G Walking Dead analysis
Batman Begins Script analysis
PPT attached here
LO2 Task 2
Character:
Female
5'10
Asian
Black hair
Clothes:
Black Leather jacket
Jeans
Sport trainers
red scarf
white shirt
Pocket Contents:
USB flash drive
Mobile phone
Torch, wind up
Being chased by:
The Yakuza, they are pursuing her for the money she owes them for smuggling her into America.
Has a tattoo of a barcode on the back of her neck.
Script feedback
Length:
Expand on the story make it 5 pages..
Format:
use more parenthetical as well as show and don't tell.
Structure:
Standard but is appropriate to the story.
Dialogue:
make sure to differentiate characters before and after they are introduced, do this wih vivid descriptions of each character.
Task 3
First draft script here
A3 Ideas sheet Task 3
n Series arc:- Main character is orphaned from a young age when both of her parents are murdered.
- Their parents were murdered by cult members of the cult that they were in but left due to having an child.
- main character has religious prophecy tattooed on body (from when her parents were still cultists).
- Fast forward many years, character is adolescent and living a normal life when former cult member spots them and tries to kill them.
- failing resulting in him being admitted to hospital.
- Coma patient's brother visits him in hospital and tells him of protagonist then falls into coma.
- Brother swears revenge and begins tracking protagonist across country, so that he can kill them.
- Upon learning of her survival, the cult, dormant for years begins to start up again across the country in order to prevent protagonist's death and recover prophecy.
- Protagonist begins arms dealing in order to gain connections and find out who killed their parents.
- Is supplied with these weapons by corrupt detective who steals guns from evidence locker in exchange for some of the money.
- corrupt cop is under surveillance by FBI.
- High profile deal is about to occur, corrupt detective an protagonist are going to meet buyer in person.
- FBI knows about this and prepares to catch them in act and arrest them.
- Protagonist and cop show up to deal and prepare to make transaction, buyer turns out to be Brother and used deal as a way to get close to protagonist.
- Just as he is about to exact revenge FBI swarm area to arrest all involved.
- Series END
- In the first episode we see protagonist in the car crash that kills their parents.
- then after the title sequence we see the protagonist walking along a street at midday.
- after some monologuing they finally arrive at their destination, a car park. here they walk up to their vehicle get in and drive out of the car park.
- they pick up their phone while driving ad make a phone call to someone, as we hear it dial we see a van approach her vehicle and as the person she is calling answers the phone and says hello, the van hits the protagonist's car.
- the protagonist wakes up in hospital, and is told by doctors that they had been out for a couple hours or so.
- doctors also inform them that the man who hit her is there also, and that the police have some questions for protagonist.
- protagonist answer questions and tells police that it was all an accident.
- then protagonist visits the man who tells them that he saw their tattoo and knows who they are.
- protagonist is about to inquire more when man begins screaming as machines around him start to beep and go haywire.
- nurses rush into room and protag is shut out.
- protagonist burst into their home and starts gathering up clothes and putting them in a suitcase as well as smashing a vase and gathering up the money inside.
- then protagonist leaves walks out into the night with suitcase and walks to train station.
- then we see a white van arrive outside protagonist's former home and four men exit van and knock on the door, after waiting for some time they knock again and then break into the building, they begin searching the house and see the place in disarray, and the empty wardrobe.
- they begin pouring gasoline in the rooms and then one by one exit the house, the last person to leave lights a match and throws it into the house then runs to the van with the others, they speed off into the night.
- episode END
Opening:
TBD
Most crime dramas are similar in their conventions, these include:
- Mysteries that the audience can solve within the show, before the show itself reveals them. e.g Why certain character refuse to be interviewed by police
- Sub plots and b stories between the characters that link up with the main mystery. e.g In CSI different clues at the crime scene will be analysed by different people then brought together towards the end.
- Either a main character that the series follows or a team of characters. e.g Law And Order follows a team of detectives, whereas Luther follows one.
- Usually follows the police side of the law but not always. e.g Luther follows a detective whereas dexter is about the killer himself.
- Can sometimes show us the crime being committed at the very beginning so that the rest of the show is dedicated to solving the mystery of "whodunnit". e.g the CSI series always starts the show with the crime being committed and doesn't show faces except for the victim or victims, we then see this flashback numerous times in the show as more clues arise and flesh out the scene.
Script draft story arc:
- Protagonist is seen entering a very shady looking bar, and upon entering is watched by all of the bars patrons.
- Moment is very tense but protagonist doesn't seem too worried as they make their way to bar and ask for whereabouts of someone named "Toybox" barman seems skeptical at first but points them to back room.
- Protagonist enters backroom and is immediately held at gunpoint by two men.
- In fornt of protagonist sits a man at a desk who reveals him self to be Toybox and asks what the protagonist wants.
- Protagonist telles Toybox they would like to sell him some weapons, and Toybox begins to laugh.
- Sensing he is alone he gestures to the two men with guns and they join him in laughing.
- After this he tells protagonist that he is a very careful man and that it wont be that easy to catch him red-handed, one of the men checks protagonist for a wire and after a moment of searching informs Toybox that protagonist is not wearing any kind of listening device.
- Toybox then commends protag for being brave enough to come there and arranges to set up a deal for him.
- Protag leaves.
- Then Protag arrives at meeting and waits.
- after some time a van shows up and men get out and start to make offers for weapons with protag.
- Protag clearly says somethign that offends the men because one of them pulls gun out and threatens protag.
- Protag then tries to calm situation down but man refuses to put gun away, he readies himself to shoot protag but is then shot himself, one of the other men approaches and tells protag to consider it as a gesture of trust protag seems visibly shaken but nontheless points to a crate sitting off to the side.
- Man walks over opens crate and smiles at its contents.
- He then gestrues to another of the men and that man gives a briefcase to Protag who opens it, looks inside and then closes it and walks away.
- As they are walkign man shouts out to them to stop.
- Protag turns around and the man asks why the crate has police markings on it.
- Before protag can answer another man shows up(detective scaletta) who then informs them that they are stolen form police evidence lock-up.
Original script here
1) Try not to write too much in the descriptive segments of the piece.
2) Characters are all very fleshed out, but consider name revision for Toybox.
3) Make sure to show and don't tell.
Script feedback sheet 1
here
Script feedback sheet 2
here
Script feedback sheet 3
here
Review feedback blogpost
1) Try not to write too much in the descriptive segments of the piece.
2) Characters are all very fleshed out, but consider name revision for Toybox.
3) Make sure to show and don't tell
Script Draft 2 based on feedback here
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